從『劍橋雅思7』官方範文解析高分作文

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

　　Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

　　觀點比較選擇類的題目，題幹中有兩個觀點 ：

　　觀點一：先天具備
　　觀點二：後天養成

　　比較兩個觀點並且給出自己的看法，則應該給出兩個觀點的合理之處，比較之後在進行自己的選擇表態

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　　The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.（開頭段落描述題幹所討論問題的普遍性。開頭句式簡短，不冗贅，一個複合句搞定。插入語的使用避免了題幹的機械性重複，同時保證了句子的連續性）

　　Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. （－ly副詞開頭主題段落一肯定第一個觀點，表示作者本身的態度）（從句和被動語態的使用）So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.（模糊例證，支持上一句中的觀點。從句的使用。連接詞 so 的使用）

　　However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. （轉折詞however,承接上文，引出第二個觀點的支持論證）（字彙方面，innate, differentiate）（語法方面，完整複合句的使用）In other words, there is more to the skill than a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.（對於觀點二的支援解釋）（連詞in other words的使用）

　　I personally think that some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. （表達自己對觀點一的部分支援）（字彙方面， inherit）Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level.（解釋論證，比較反差）（字彙方面，excel, comparable level） （結構方面，連接詞 such 的使用）But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. （轉折詞but引出作者的觀點：兼收並取）（字彙方面，nature versus nurture, mutually exclusive）Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. （用例證進一步解釋“兼收並取”）（字彙,exceptional）Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent（假設例證支持自己觀點。排比雙重否定句強調肯定效果）.（字彙方面，continuous, exploit）

　　In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required. （個人表態支持兩個觀點的結合。插入語的使用。）